"Constricted" Poem by 15 year old male.

[LaughGiraffe]

I agree with abc_dragon that you should try to be a little more metaphorical and allow the reader to draw the meaning out. But it's still a good poem. My faaaaavorite line is "Hoping one day she will justify her creation". I like how you kind of explore both sides of a budding relationship, the unsure boy carefully expressing himself and the guarded girl who's too caught up in her own misery to allow herself to be cared for