07-08-2013, 11:23 PM
Everything you have mentioned is on point, including the tardive dyskinesia. I admit I am a little lost with the fifth stanza. I am already working on it. I wanted to infer the flavor of the wooden spoon, they are made from Fir trees, and the way it mixed with the vanilla ice cream. It was the only sense of time. They have vanilla on Wednesday and were usually out by Saturday. I really like how you mentioned the "snap" of the doors. I wish I would have incorporated that sound in my opener now. Although, most who have been behind those doors will already know that sound. What a suspended world that is. I enjoyed your comments and working on that stanza as we speak. I work many hours and find little time to play, so it may be a few days. Thank you for your critique.