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July Swamp

billy Offline

Are you alluding to me?

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07-08-2013, 04:25 PM

great effort Ian

a decent senryu, a suggestion would be

groans
flood the wood
amphibious orgy

in order to make it a tighter image and haiku

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July Swamp - by Ian James - 07-08-2013, 01:48 PM

RE: July Swamp - by billy - 07-08-2013, 04:25 PM

RE: July Swamp - by Ian James - 07-08-2013, 04:55 PM

RE: July Swamp - by billy - 07-08-2013, 05:17 PM

RE: July Swamp - by Keith - 07-08-2013, 07:23 PM

RE: July Swamp - by Malu - 09-22-2013, 07:56 AM

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