New - and first draft... beginning poetry.

[hardon]

Breddy gud. Breddy sad. Rhythm is a bit off here I can't seem to read it right, it halts and is a jerky read for me but does it matter? Depends who you ask. I wouldn't compromise content for a smoother read.
You've got a few christmas present rhymes in here but nothing cringeworthy, if you're only just starting out I think it's a pretty good poem. Someone else will probably be able to dissect it and put every flaw under the magnifying glass. Anyway, keep writin'.