07-02-2013, 06:09 AM
(07-01-2013, 07:16 PM)alexaomame Wrote: First poem I am submitting on this site, or any site, really.alexaomame,
The Replacer
Your dogs were here for five minutes
They took a thousand shits
The gravel, the grass, the cement
The malodorousness lessens everyday
The lack is the replacer
your prose is thought provoking (maybe because it is puzzling, for me at least) ... the juxtaposition of quite common language with a sophisticated multisyllabic term, your topic, your ending. There must be something deeper here ... something I missed. Keep writing and submitting ... I am realizing it is how we grow competence in our passion. I too am new at this ... submitting and critiquing ... cheers!