07-02-2013, 06:00 AM
Standing in the cattle crowd of fashion painted clones.
Insipid chatter prattles, an endless drowning drone.
All around me act as one, that's when I feel alone.
Framing into phrasing all the feelings that I own.
Finding that the more I try the more I turn to stone.
Fighting to express myself, that's when I feel alone.
Dreaming of a drifting life, embracing the unknown.
Knowing that I clipped my wings and wishing that I'd flown.
Wondering who I could be, that's when I feel alone.
Watching myself reaching out for sins I don't condone.
Wondering how I proceed and wanting to atone.
A stranger in the mirror says that's when I feel alone.
Shoulders brushing blindly past; clichés I trade intone.
Realizing that they're hiding secrets of their own.
Bonded in our solitude, united and alone.
Note: Still trying to wrap my mind around a villanelle or other style but I wanted to make some of the smaller corrections. Thanks to all for the guidance!
Insipid chatter prattles, an endless drowning drone.
All around me act as one, that's when I feel alone.
Framing into phrasing all the feelings that I own.
Finding that the more I try the more I turn to stone.
Fighting to express myself, that's when I feel alone.
Dreaming of a drifting life, embracing the unknown.
Knowing that I clipped my wings and wishing that I'd flown.
Wondering who I could be, that's when I feel alone.
Watching myself reaching out for sins I don't condone.
Wondering how I proceed and wanting to atone.
A stranger in the mirror says that's when I feel alone.
Shoulders brushing blindly past; clichés I trade intone.
Realizing that they're hiding secrets of their own.
Bonded in our solitude, united and alone.
Note: Still trying to wrap my mind around a villanelle or other style but I wanted to make some of the smaller corrections. Thanks to all for the guidance!