07-02-2013, 12:03 AM
hey for the feedback!
@news - i agree edision is a crouch of boneless jive. took your suggestion and modified a few lines for edit 2
@Vol- thanks for point out grammar and rhythm inconsistencies. hopefully, with this the are corrected.
@Ian thanks so much for the advice, like a breath of fresh air i must say...ahhhh...fresh air i liked you critique s3 and s4.
and thanks for the writing advise. one of my favorite things to do is write poem for random people at coffee shops. i love the act of writing and creating on paper
@news - i agree edision is a crouch of boneless jive. took your suggestion and modified a few lines for edit 2
@Vol- thanks for point out grammar and rhythm inconsistencies. hopefully, with this the are corrected.
@Ian thanks so much for the advice, like a breath of fresh air i must say...ahhhh...fresh air i liked you critique s3 and s4.
and thanks for the writing advise. one of my favorite things to do is write poem for random people at coffee shops. i love the act of writing and creating on paper
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
Bunx
--mark twain
Bunx