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my light

my light
rowens
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06-30-2013, 01:49 AM
The way it's put together isn't very effective. The talker does sound more sinister because of the simplicity and the weakness of the poem. And that is a bit effective. But is that what you want? Or do you want a stronger poem?
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my light - by konstantin27 - 06-30-2013, 01:41 AM
RE: my light - by rowens - 06-30-2013, 01:49 AM
RE: my light - by billy - 06-30-2013, 10:51 AM
RE: my light - by Vistaldust - 06-30-2013, 10:53 AM
RE: my light - by konstantin27 - 06-30-2013, 01:20 PM
RE: my light - by billy - 06-30-2013, 01:42 PM
RE: my light - by konstantin27 - 06-30-2013, 02:57 PM
RE: my light - by milo - 06-30-2013, 03:13 PM
RE: my light - by Bunx - 06-30-2013, 11:35 PM
RE: my light - by Vistaldust - 07-01-2013, 05:22 AM



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