06-26-2013, 10:55 AM
i liked the read but it seems toi be in conflict content wise.
They're battery and buttery.
Hardly any butter.
look out for redundancies,
hot burning, or burning hot. why not
that scorch my tongue (an example)
the last stanza i found to be very sad.
i hope you don't take this the wrong way but it might be a great poem to read to kids. it has a roald dahl feel to it.
They're battery and buttery.
Hardly any butter.
look out for redundancies,
hot burning, or burning hot. why not
that scorch my tongue (an example)
the last stanza i found to be very sad.
i hope you don't take this the wrong way but it might be a great poem to read to kids. it has a roald dahl feel to it.