outside

[Brownlie]

A soothing laugh can calm an aching soul
Yet a melody from a bird will wake the man
It is not trivial, the pursuit of senses,
we live to find meaning in life and seldom
do without sadness.

It was along the banks of the Hurricane -- You might want to start with this line but I'm not quite sure, the hurricane is a compelling image.
Shoals, where great large stones set
with rushing water raging over them.

The sound was like white noise
from the television only amplified
There were oaks, pines and maples
each in an array of shaded oranges
reds and greens. -- Maybe even more description here.

It wasn't long before someone slipped
on the rocks and started to wail
The smell of charcoal and the excitement
of voices chattering, -- You could expand and describe this incident more.
Reminded me of the birds in the morning
right before sunrise. -- You might want to end on this line again I'm not quite sure.
Great symmetry echoing

you have some compelling imagery and some good action in this poem. I think you can write in more detail about a specific incident of someone slipping. Expanding on descriptions of the physical landscape may also help. From the other things you posted this seems the best. Hopefully, you get some more comments.