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This could use some work imo. I think your ideas could be conveyed a bit more clearer. Also could leave out some phrases. Like this line "And who could care to deny praise". I feel you could take out "to" and it would flow smoother because it sounds out of place to me. Still I could see this being a good drop. Keep at it.
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Untitled - by thislimeismine - 06-15-2013, 07:25 AM
RE: Untitled - by Dru Flores - 06-24-2013, 10:07 AM
RE: Untitled - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-24-2013, 02:28 PM



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