06-19-2013, 10:40 AM
Hi, I'm new to this site, I'm not used to sharing critiques because I haven't been involved in any groups of like-minded people but ill do my best.
In the first stanza, I think it reading "dream-like quality" is a bit redundant after the next two lines, because those words alone create the dream like atmosphere you've described above. It needs no introduction.
I really like the realization of the grandeur you feel when no one else is there to compare yourself to.
Overall I think you did a wonderful job conveying the atmosphere one feels in this setting.
In the first stanza, I think it reading "dream-like quality" is a bit redundant after the next two lines, because those words alone create the dream like atmosphere you've described above. It needs no introduction.
I really like the realization of the grandeur you feel when no one else is there to compare yourself to.
Overall I think you did a wonderful job conveying the atmosphere one feels in this setting.