Seeing her.

[R.C. KITCHENS]

She was charming and intriguing.
In the way she carried herself, She employed no girlish airs for she was not a girl.
You explained how she carries herself as "charming and intriguing" I think you could cut out" in the way she carried herself" completely. I also think you can say that "she is no girl" and we will get what you mean.
She wore the wounds of broken passions. Old beyond her years her eyes where youthful but experienced
I think you can lose "the" in She wore the wounds of broken passions. also dont see the need to explain the same thing twice, "old beyond her years" and "her eyes "were" youthful but experienced. I believe you can do away with old beyond her years as it just isnt needed.
Delicate and gracious, she gifted us with a fleeting smile. Any man would be blessed to receive it.personally i see the poem ending after "she gifted us with a fleeting smile" the following after it just seems too much.

Sublime and sensitive, sensuous and sensible.
her hair, careless and lustrous; complimented her playful, rouged, pouting, lips.

She understood you just as you would like to be understood.
She had was modest, expected nothing of anyone.

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Bit stuck any help?

I like some of it, I think you got a nice piece to develop.