I want to be a poet

[milo]

It is helpful. But you have to realize the style of my writing is not meant to be so structured and configured to be what a standard poem would look like. I do write to rhyme and my flow is more rapesk. I literally write the first thing that pops in my head and I keep it. Normally the capitalization is corrected. The Beatles reference you found was never one. You give me too much credit. Haha. You have to think more abstractly and less structured with my writing. The point of the racism was not to shock, it's point was to inform. Each stanza is a new thought. A new story. I generally perform this aloud and when heard the flow and delivery add a lot that you couldn't know just reading it yourself. Also, i will never and have never used punctuation. I never liked how overbearingly structured that made writing. I appreciate the feedback and I will work on some things.

They don't have to realise it at all, you have to realise that your writing needs to stand on its own. If it needs you to guard it or explain it away, it probably needs a lot of work. In this case it could use some serious study time by its author on what does and doesn't work in poetry. You need to separate yourself from your writing and learn to take critique properly if you want to improve. The serious critique section is for work shopping, not showcasing