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War with Gog and Magog
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06-16-2013, 05:41 PM
i think this is an excellent start. you have excellent imagery and vocabulary. a few spelling and grammatical errors but overall impressive. but this piece lacks a central theme to tie it all together. i'm not sure i follow the flow of this poem or really a central emotion, bigger image or story. keep writing.
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War with Gog and Magog - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-14-2013, 03:18 PM
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RE: Sky is spiraling round like coliseum pillars - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-20-2013, 04:27 PM
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