06-12-2013, 03:39 PM
I like the simplicity of the piece. You use "your" alot. I think you could lose a few of those. Maybe lose some periods. Imagery is here in small doses.
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I remember... - by peterjohnson68 - 06-11-2013, 11:51 AM
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RE: I remember... - by c.gutzwiller - 06-12-2013, 03:57 AM
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