Murder Scene

[milo]

Rather than "liken to", the phrase should be "like unto", which is archaic and I'd be tempted to leave it out.

Otherwise, some really good edits, well done

what about :

a great roar, lichen too, an industrial fan, etc

?

I appreciate your feedback. I thought "lichen" is a plant life.

more fungus than plant life, yah. It could be like a list of weird things going on in this room:

a great roar, lichen too, an industrial fan, etc.