06-10-2013, 02:53 PM
Wow man, this one speaks to me. Food security and integrity are something I research a lot and am very passionate about. Monsanto, in particular...
As far as the poem goes, I loved the way it started. Specifying 'agenda' down to the Monsanto issue allowed it to sound much more real, more accessible. I liked how the poem presented the reader/population as a passive player, without the ability to change the system. I will say that after the first few stanzas, the poem moved toward the media and a more generalized anti-government stance that was maybe a little less accessible than the beginning. However, perhaps you were going for a more generalized commentary at that point.
In any case, awesome stuff.
Favorite part: American freedom was something to be proud of
Now it's a phrase meant to rile people up.
Real talk.
Keep it up!
As far as the poem goes, I loved the way it started. Specifying 'agenda' down to the Monsanto issue allowed it to sound much more real, more accessible. I liked how the poem presented the reader/population as a passive player, without the ability to change the system. I will say that after the first few stanzas, the poem moved toward the media and a more generalized anti-government stance that was maybe a little less accessible than the beginning. However, perhaps you were going for a more generalized commentary at that point.
In any case, awesome stuff.
Favorite part: American freedom was something to be proud of
Now it's a phrase meant to rile people up.
Real talk.
Keep it up!