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Murder Scene

Murder Scene
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#5
06-09-2013, 02:42 PM
Rather than "liken to", the phrase should be "like unto", which is archaic and I'd be tempted to leave it out.

Otherwise, some really good edits, well done Smile
It could be worse
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Murder Scene - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-08-2013, 03:43 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by Leanne - 06-08-2013, 04:12 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by billy - 06-09-2013, 08:08 AM
RE: Murder Scene - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-09-2013, 01:16 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by Leanne - 06-09-2013, 02:42 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by milo - 06-11-2013, 02:48 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-12-2013, 03:05 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by milo - 06-12-2013, 03:36 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-12-2013, 03:41 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by milo - 06-12-2013, 05:59 PM
RE: Murder Scene - by billy - 06-10-2013, 07:34 AM



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