Murder Scene

[Leanne]

Hi R.C., you have an interesting flavour to your writing that I hope you develop. You have some nice little internal rhymes running through this. The biggest problem is superfluous words, e.g. instead of "there is not a window in the room, only a door", you might think about "no window, only a door", which says just as much with less words. Similarly, there's no real point to "only it lightly resembles one" and all the repetitions of "in the floor".

Good debut, welcome to the forum (and thanks for leaving feedback around the place!)