Black diamond

[UnicornRainbowCake]

Whether I close my eyes, or vice versa vice versa - eyes my open? I prefer 'just keep them open' or something simpler
Whether the, 'whether sun rises' makes it sound like only some of the sun might, etc sun rises or blasts into damnation

Draw her add punctuation here
God's beauty is always in a form of a creation I don't see what else it could be in - if you are a God believer, then God created everything

If the swan's song has been sung
And all the rains a moment ago - stopped

Paint her
Guitar's chord A has the right to opt I don't like A. A is horrible. But anyway, opt to what?

Softness of her lips; cliche
easiness of her smiles; Did you know it takes more muscles to frown than it does to smile?
those make me wish - to rise I don't think the hyphen is needed

Blossomed angelic white narcissus; Pick one, not three - maybe two at the most
watches over the deed the deed - are you two getting it on?

Save us punctuation
I will till hell freezes over intercede too abstract
for the lost souls begging for a moment - of her
and the light that shines throug' the eye's I think her is repeated too much, both being at the end of a line. I'd try swopping the words round a bit here.
of hers.