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06-06-2013, 11:34 AM
This poem is very relatable and I love the last two sections. I would suggest showing a little more in the beginning.. for example how you do with the line "in children's jars, in children's dreams?"... very poetic. Try to do more visualization like that in the beginning. Excellent poem!
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in the air - by anna randy - 06-06-2013, 11:28 AM
RE: in the air - by ccfly - 06-06-2013, 11:34 AM
RE: in the air - by anna randy - 06-06-2013, 11:57 AM
RE: in the air - by Brownlie - 06-06-2013, 12:21 PM
RE: in the air - by philoinlove - 06-06-2013, 02:32 PM
RE: in the air - by newsclippings - 06-06-2013, 04:19 PM
RE: in the air - by canofworms - 06-06-2013, 10:38 PM
RE: in the air - by Leanne - 06-07-2013, 04:56 AM
RE: in the air - by R.C. KITCHENS - 06-09-2013, 02:08 PM
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