< eventually everything becomes a poem >
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(05-24-2013, 12:30 AM)rayheinrich Wrote:  



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\ < eventually everything becomes a poem > \ \ that \ fireplug \ for \ instance \ \ it's been \ sitting \ minding \ its own \ business \ for 50 \ years \ \ stolidly \ enduring \ dogs \ \ patiently \ awaiting \ fire \ \ soberly enjoying when a fireman comes in summer gives \ its head a twist and kids come dancing in its waters


I would have liked it more if you trimmed 'stolidly' and 'patiently'. Feels more powerfully dramatic to hit soberly then.

Still, it's miscellaneous!! Have fun! Carry on!
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RE: < eventually everything becomes a poem > - by milo - 06-03-2013, 07:28 AM



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