Rats (Move it to Miscellaneous)

[Magpie]

Hi Brownlie,
This is an excellent piece of prose, with some really good details in it.
Do you want to make it more poetic? I nearly asked why it was called rats there, but thank God I manage to get it just in time.
I really do think that it stands up as a very well executed prose piece, but then it comes down to the age old argument of what is prose and what is poetry?
Was it a rhetorical question? it's quite early in the morning for me to be in serious critique.
I have to run.

Hi Brownlie,
I've been meaning to comment on this again and I really do want to reiterate what I said before when I first commented on it, (well not the bit about it being too early in the morning) I've just read it again and it had just as much effect on me now as what it did two days ago. I think sometimes when people write things quite quickly or are in a state tiredness like what you said you were when you wrote this, then it sometimes helps us by stopping us from thinking too much and using the intellect to edit as we go along.
I really like this piece and I hope you don't intend to disregard it, because if you do I would have to adopt it and I don't have a lot of room as it is.
One more thing, I know my lifestyle is a bit mad and I use the internet at all crazy different times of the day, I'm used to it, but it seemed that without fail for about 4 days every time I logged on you were also logged on, you're a trooper. You have put a lot of time in commenting on a lot of poems and I for one appreciate it.
Cheers
AR