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Hi untitled,

If your username wasn't the same as the poem I would just assume you hadn't settled on a title, but since it is I am assuming a theme (that might not exist :p )-- in any event feel free to ignore me and welcome to the forum.

I see a progression in this and while I can definitely feel an anonymous pilgrimage happening, I also think that rather than skimming the surface, you could dig a little deeper without losing the sage-like feel of the poem. Sometimes I am guilty of omitting pieces of the puzzle because my mind can recreate those pieces while the reader's cannot-- I feel that is happening here but ofc I could be wrong.

I do like the word choices mostly, but don't like the twisted grammar of the last lines (fear not just doesn't do it for me ).

Anyway, just my thoughts-- thanks for sharing

Thank you.

Very insightful.

You are exactly right. However, I am at a loss for words. I feel as if everything the reader needs is in front of them, if they can connect the dots. I guess I just do not want to make things too easy for you.

It's fascinating that you're interpretation is the polar opposite of the previous poster (who liked the last lines but had no affinity to the rest of the poem).

Your interpretation would indicate that you think abstractly (or more abstractly than the norm) and that you are very open-minded. Your dislike of the last lines may reflect your dislike for societal norms (especially those imposed on you against your will).

Again, just my opinion, and thus meaningless.