Jess Land Sum

[James]

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thanks for geez man

it started my day off with a smile. hi james. sometimes a poem feels as though it needs to much of edit to be in serious. perhaps mild or novice would be better suited where the feedback is still honest but less harsh.
i'll have a go at giving you some feedback on it in now.

Geez man I only meant like a tip or two on it (puncuation). Can you elaborate on how you found it clichéd though?, I don't understand. Also the same with my word use, what exactly about it was incompetent. I don't really get offended easily, but I'd like for you to at least give examples to go along with your crit on it, instead of just saying there's something wrong, I'd like to see why you thought that way. And get a grip on myself? Im sorry that I asked for a little help on punctuation, theres no need to attack the poet personally for it. And once again, with moot pieces, and little poetic merit, this is full of poetic devices that I actually spent time writing, elaborate on that, because from here it looks like your saying that just because you didn't get it. And i'll try to find someone that could possibly help me with minor tips on punctuation, and maybe repost it.

Thanks,
-James

No problem Billy, anyday that I make a person smile is a day well spent , I know I've posted quite a few on mild, but on mild I wasn't able to get too much of a constructive response due to how complicated it was, so a member suggested that I try posting here. He did mention to try to make the punctuation better, but I wasn't too sure how so I thought definitely someone here would have a tip. But thank for still having a go at it, because you know, the punctuation . I'll be looking forward to your honest opinion on it