05-25-2013, 12:29 AM
I really enjoyed reading this and will now go check out some of your other pieces... But first, I just wanted to say I personally liked the rythem of your poem. it doesn't make sense to me to structure a poems rythem in a way that has been done over and over.. If you were to humm along to this poem it would be unique to this piece of writing. I'm not a good poet by any stretch of the imagination but one reason I do enjoy writing poetry is you can break any rule you want (in my mind) as long as you you still give it a poetic feel and give us an enjoyable read. Also, to me, writing about daily life is extremely difficult. When I attempt to do so it ends up sounding monotones and just as boring as the actual occurrence. This however had an upbeat feel for A not so exciting situation. Which I can apprecite because i cant make that happen in my own writing. Thanks for sharing