Brain Game

[milo]

For a first poem from a novice poet it is pretty good. Your meter is off in a few patches and you have a bit of awkward phrasing like "Engine of past and future gain" , "we decide, By considered thought", etc. I was surprised to see this in the serious critique forum but there certainly aren't any rules against it, I just feel it might be better suited to some polishing before the "serious" shredding that this forum is known for.