Jess Land Sum

[James]

Geez man I only meant like a tip or two on it (puncuation). Can you elaborate on how you found it clichéd though?, I don't understand. Also the same with my word use, what exactly about it was incompetent. I don't really get offended easily, but I'd like for you to at least give examples to go along with your crit on it, instead of just saying there's something wrong, I'd like to see why you thought that way. And get a grip on myself? Im sorry that I asked for a little help on punctuation, theres no need to attack the poet personally for it. And once again, with moot pieces, and little poetic merit, this is full of poetic devices that I actually spent time writing, elaborate on that, because from here it looks like your saying that just because you didn't get it. And i'll try to find someone that could possibly help me with minor tips on punctuation, and maybe repost it.

Thanks,
-James