05-21-2013, 02:48 AM
Rhyme meter and alliteration were delightful. I found many cliches however. Lesson Learned, Love will keep us warm...They fit so well in to the rhyme I can see why they were used . But more time and thought may have eliminated them.
One doesn't see the time you spent making these words fit together often and I appreciate your submission. Thanks for sharing it.
One doesn't see the time you spent making these words fit together often and I appreciate your submission. Thanks for sharing it.

