05-19-2013, 11:11 AM
Hi James,
I've watched this poem develop for the past few days now and although I admit that I don't fully understand it, I am fascinated by it and the concepts and images within it.
Firstly I'll say that it is extremely well written, with certain poetic qualities that I particularly enjoyed from your other poem "Genesis".
I won't hazard any guesses as to the meanings of what you've written, I think in some ways it is very complex and philosophical. I did a little bit of research on the net but then found that I had about 10 different PDF documents all talking about "Ghost in the Machine" but yet they all seem to be talking about totally different topics and then my head got a bit mashed up and I was really none the wiser.
At one point while you were writing it, I thought it was heading towards an experiment which I read about that an astronaut carried out on the Moon involving a hammer and a feather dropped at the same time. Which seems to represent for some people an aspect of the original "ghost in the machine" concept/philoshophy. It's also been used as magic and to explain magic, which I know was a strong theme in your last poem.
As regards the bits that I like from your poem, there are passages towards the end and certain sentences like "Across everything, across something, across galaxies, across nothing" and "Across the wonder tracks lays a quiver The eternity cycle of the bound infinity" excellent poetically philisophical stuff.
Also you obviously know your stuff as regards space/universe, which has recently become a fascination of mine, so your descriptions of nebulas, rebirth and proto planets all appeal.
"Or the swamp's endless cycle of nebula calling I'm the cloaked murmur to the proto planet" I like this also even though I'm not totally sure why.
I will continue to read it and hopefully understand more as I do, but the poetic talent is definitely there, and I notice that nobody has commented as yet and I don't think that you will get very many comments here, although you never know. But I would say that don't view a lack of comments as a sign that people don't like it, because it doesn't always work like that here I've noticed.
Sorry if I never managed to unlock it's meaning, nevertheless I still enjoyed it immensely.
Thanks for the read.
AR
I've watched this poem develop for the past few days now and although I admit that I don't fully understand it, I am fascinated by it and the concepts and images within it.
Firstly I'll say that it is extremely well written, with certain poetic qualities that I particularly enjoyed from your other poem "Genesis".
I won't hazard any guesses as to the meanings of what you've written, I think in some ways it is very complex and philosophical. I did a little bit of research on the net but then found that I had about 10 different PDF documents all talking about "Ghost in the Machine" but yet they all seem to be talking about totally different topics and then my head got a bit mashed up and I was really none the wiser.
At one point while you were writing it, I thought it was heading towards an experiment which I read about that an astronaut carried out on the Moon involving a hammer and a feather dropped at the same time. Which seems to represent for some people an aspect of the original "ghost in the machine" concept/philoshophy. It's also been used as magic and to explain magic, which I know was a strong theme in your last poem.
As regards the bits that I like from your poem, there are passages towards the end and certain sentences like "Across everything, across something, across galaxies, across nothing" and "Across the wonder tracks lays a quiver The eternity cycle of the bound infinity" excellent poetically philisophical stuff.
Also you obviously know your stuff as regards space/universe, which has recently become a fascination of mine, so your descriptions of nebulas, rebirth and proto planets all appeal.
"Or the swamp's endless cycle of nebula calling I'm the cloaked murmur to the proto planet" I like this also even though I'm not totally sure why.
I will continue to read it and hopefully understand more as I do, but the poetic talent is definitely there, and I notice that nobody has commented as yet and I don't think that you will get very many comments here, although you never know. But I would say that don't view a lack of comments as a sign that people don't like it, because it doesn't always work like that here I've noticed.
Sorry if I never managed to unlock it's meaning, nevertheless I still enjoyed it immensely.
Thanks for the read.
AR
wae aye man ye radgie