05-17-2013, 11:05 AM
(05-15-2013, 01:56 PM)Tommy Wrote: What brings you to this lonely placeGreat premise for a poem, trapping a moment in time and making it eternal. Great read. Thanks.
to gaze into antiquity?
What bends your eye and makes you see
the ancient lights - hidden to so many?
What restless ghosts
awaken you to secret skies?
What whispers draw you out
into the corridors of perpetuity? This stanza makes me agree with billy on the astronomy aspect
Oh what a clever trick!
To capture chaos in a box.
Define infinity in ones and naught
and trap eternity within your lens.what if you took out "within your lens". I think its over stating and sounds stronger with just "trap eternity" as the end.
“We, the unwilling, led by the unknowing, are doing the impossible for the ungrateful. We have done so much, for so long, with so little, we are now qualified to do anything with nothing.
― Konstantin Josef Jireček
― Konstantin Josef Jireček