05-15-2013, 03:22 PM
(05-15-2013, 06:16 AM)ambrosial revelation Wrote: Balmy spring evening,i like the image of gossamer capturing light
illuminated street light,
gossamer glowing.
Quote:Towering pylon,above is a given, i see nothing wrong with just the one word there, you could us sparks or flashes or something else if you really want the 7. other than that it's a keeper.
electricity above,
buzzing bees below.
Quote:Vivid red petals...i'm not sure but i don't think punctuation is used in the haiku (it's worth checking in case i'm wrong
unsheltered, weather beaten
Wallflower swaying.
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