05-14-2013, 01:01 PM
(05-14-2013, 12:45 PM)Sam33lynn Wrote: I like how you opened and closed the poem and the emotions begin this poem are real which is cool. The only thing that I'd say, which is totally minor is to proofread a little. For instance, the line "you feel weak you need her close to your chest" doesn't make much sense unless punctuated a little bit. Other than that, it's a good readi agree with that. i'll make that little edit.
i dont like Stanza 3, lines 13/14. "Now, where she once stood..../Outlined her memory..." That part I will say I struggled on. What do you think?