05-10-2013, 06:40 PM
thanks all for these many responses, I appreciate the time you took and am very pleased you enjoyed it. now to make it better...
esp thanks to serge for picking it apart and making me see things that even I had missed ;D and you're right in a way, I started out trying to talk about sounds I couldn't hear, but as AR said I strayed more to the visual. @AR I read your poem and you did a much better job than I did actually sticking to your guns and writing what you were supposed to. mine got away from me but I didn't mind too much, seeing as that's generally how my life goes.
anyway enough blah blah, thanks for the suggestions everyone and I'll be posting a revision soon!
esp thanks to serge for picking it apart and making me see things that even I had missed ;D and you're right in a way, I started out trying to talk about sounds I couldn't hear, but as AR said I strayed more to the visual. @AR I read your poem and you did a much better job than I did actually sticking to your guns and writing what you were supposed to. mine got away from me but I didn't mind too much, seeing as that's generally how my life goes.
anyway enough blah blah, thanks for the suggestions everyone and I'll be posting a revision soon!
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.