05-10-2013, 05:43 AM
About first lines, the pit is long forgotten.
Line 4-5 I mean one heart and the same heart can't see the flame.
English is not my mother tongue and I didn't do almost any editing on the original so it's raw, also I wrote it in 20 minutes or so and it could be better, I agree. I was feeling like I'm in hell at that moment and I'm glad you noticed it, that was my goal in a way. Thank you for comment and thank you for advice.
Line 4-5 I mean one heart and the same heart can't see the flame.
English is not my mother tongue and I didn't do almost any editing on the original so it's raw, also I wrote it in 20 minutes or so and it could be better, I agree. I was feeling like I'm in hell at that moment and I'm glad you noticed it, that was my goal in a way. Thank you for comment and thank you for advice.