05-10-2013, 12:53 AM
This poem is so real, so imaginative and full of emotion. I adore it. I have read it several times, and every time it has the same, strong impact on me. I can relate to the poem at a personal level, and with the vivid descriptions, it was almost like I was there.
You have so many beautiful lines: 'and atop her head, a proportionate white bow holds up society’s desire.' 'right left right again. Wrong.' 'Dark crevices divide the sidewalk as gender divides the world.' 'Where birch trees guard the sidewalk from speeding cars' just to name a few. Very clever stuff. I don't really have any criticism, I just want to say thank you for a refreshingly different poem
You have so many beautiful lines: 'and atop her head, a proportionate white bow holds up society’s desire.' 'right left right again. Wrong.' 'Dark crevices divide the sidewalk as gender divides the world.' 'Where birch trees guard the sidewalk from speeding cars' just to name a few. Very clever stuff. I don't really have any criticism, I just want to say thank you for a refreshingly different poem