05-09-2013, 10:05 PM
hi emmalou,
I think this poem would benefit from a more narrow subject... "well here it is, what, where, when and how. " --> that's a lot to take on, and how broad the subject is takes away from it's power, imo. maybe you could choose something specific, like the image of a best friend's legs being blown across the floor, and build from that. it'd make it more memorable.
-cloudy
I think this poem would benefit from a more narrow subject... "well here it is, what, where, when and how. " --> that's a lot to take on, and how broad the subject is takes away from it's power, imo. maybe you could choose something specific, like the image of a best friend's legs being blown across the floor, and build from that. it'd make it more memorable.
-cloudy
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