the style of the poem as far as content goes is very very generic, with cutting and slicing and a bit of stabbing. some of the syntax needs sorting out, lines 1 and 2 to mention a couple.
the 1st line you say pointy thing. do you mean a finger? say what you mean.
is this girl is....is bad syntax. you could cut a lot of the poem away (no pun intended) and it would be stronger for it. try breaking some of the lines down. it'll help you with the flow, you can always extend the lines later should you wish.
Cutting and cutting and jabbing and stabbing until she is but ash,
cutting does not go with ash
the 1st line you say pointy thing. do you mean a finger? say what you mean.
is this girl is....is bad syntax. you could cut a lot of the poem away (no pun intended) and it would be stronger for it. try breaking some of the lines down. it'll help you with the flow, you can always extend the lines later should you wish.
Cutting and cutting and jabbing and stabbing until she is but ash,
cutting does not go with ash