05-09-2013, 12:27 AM
Enjoyable poem to read and then consider.
I also think the first stanza is not needed. It was my first idea for comment ahead of reading any of the other reviews.
The poem itself, and the title, describe the scene of the poem well enough, so the first stanza becomes redundant.
But also, by removing the first stanza you remove the impersonal "I" and the thoughts of you, the writer’s mind, from the poem and thus making it more personal to the reader.
DGT
I also think the first stanza is not needed. It was my first idea for comment ahead of reading any of the other reviews.
The poem itself, and the title, describe the scene of the poem well enough, so the first stanza becomes redundant.
But also, by removing the first stanza you remove the impersonal "I" and the thoughts of you, the writer’s mind, from the poem and thus making it more personal to the reader.
DGT