the idea is not to comment on a comment but to comment on the poem, what i see is people reading the feedback then leaving a comment on the feedback.
the 1st stanza feels almost redundant, and too telly. the 1st line of the 2nd stanza really sets the poem up( like a metaphoric candle in the mind)
it's very wordy in places with too much repetition. road/chose/path/walk/alone, all wasted text. at present the poem is very tell, use some images. the laid with bricks of gold is an image, but it's also a very cliche and common phrase.
the 1st stanza feels almost redundant, and too telly. the 1st line of the 2nd stanza really sets the poem up( like a metaphoric candle in the mind)
it's very wordy in places with too much repetition. road/chose/path/walk/alone, all wasted text. at present the poem is very tell, use some images. the laid with bricks of gold is an image, but it's also a very cliche and common phrase.