Little Dancers

[Volaticus]

I was thinking of adding this as a third stanza, thoughts?

Mysteries, do they whisper?
Am I the first to listen?
What could I use for a cipher,
to know what one’s life has been?

This is JMHO, but to me it doesn't fit as well, as the stanzas you already have. For me, it weakens the poem with the questions, and doesn't really add much to your otherwise very pretty poem. It's too abstract, but I like the idea of the 'cipher'. Maybe you could play around with that. Again, just my opinion. It's your poem to do with what you feel fit