Little Dancers

[knicodemus3]

Ambrosial,

thanks for the comments! I agree the verb maybe doesn't fit well, especially since I use it later in the poem. I wanted something that gives the sunlight a more definitive shape though instead of "pours in," I might go with "pierces." Thanks again!

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LB,

Thanks! The comment about using "here" definitely helped! I reformatted the poem too; I guess it could have used some more structure. Thanks for reading!