05-06-2013, 05:54 PM
(05-04-2013, 08:10 AM)Volaticus Wrote: The words, phrasing and images made this pleasure to read. The only critic I can think of is that I don't think that 'storm' and 'arm' rhymes. But maybe that's a matter of dialect, I'm not sure. Thanks for the read, I look forward to reading your next poems.Hello, Volaticus. Thank you for your comments, and please forgive the delay in my acknowledgement.
Shakespeare, in one of his Sonnets (No. CXVI) paired ‘love’ with ‘remove’.
John Donne, in his poem ‘Song” paired ‘root’ with ‘foot’.
In these cases the final consonantal sounds are the same and the rhymes are known as ‘consonantal rhymes’. They are accepted practice, even though the rhymes are not perfect rhymes.
So I’m happy to stand by my consonantal rhyming of ‘arm’ with ’storm’.
Thank you very much for pointing out this apparent anomaly.
Regards,
Pilgrim.
Rose-lipt maidens, lightfoot lads!

