The Pulschnip

[billy]

sadly, parfait doesn't rhyme the poem has a good refrain, some good rhymes

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while its a nice little rhyming poem, it doesn't have a lot of depth, a few images would help it shine.

The Pulschnip


In multifarious, mystic ways
the Pulschnip spends her darkling days;
A-loitering here, a-prowlering there,
at no small distance from her lair,
Her purposes to profit.

The Pulschnip is a cunning creature,
who hides each grim, nefarious feature how?
Behind a smile so wondrous guiled guiled is a good word
as would inveigle some sweet child
Her appetite to surfeit.

And if upon a cloudless night
the moon is gleaming pearlsome bright, a good image, you need at least one for each verse.
She’ll scud about till break of day
to schnip a dozen souls away,
And will accept no forfeit.

Behold the Pulschnip if you dare,
at midnight dark or noonday fair;
She’ll fix you with her winsome gaze,
then bind you with her magic ways,
Her purpose soon accomplit.

Ah, sad! the victims of this Beast
that filches humans for its feast.
Where is the knight or warrior bold
who’ll slay the Pulschnip in its hold,
And make this world more parfait?


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