05-05-2013, 04:14 PM
Hi,
I like this little poem, and the subject matter is interestingly different, very different. The only thing that I might have a problem with is the first line, "crosses" doesn't sound right and I'm unsure if it is grammatically correct. Perhaps "pours in" might work better.
It's quite a change from your first poem, excellent.
Thank you.
I like this little poem, and the subject matter is interestingly different, very different. The only thing that I might have a problem with is the first line, "crosses" doesn't sound right and I'm unsure if it is grammatically correct. Perhaps "pours in" might work better.
It's quite a change from your first poem, excellent.
Thank you.
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