05-04-2013, 08:48 AM
Hi Volaticus,
I've been looking forward to read this since you said that you were going to rewrite it. I read it yesterday probably not too long after you posted it but I wanted to read it a few more times before commenting.
My first impression yesterday was that it was very complicated and with the benefit of being able to read the first two versions I think there is a freshness in the original version that is not in your new version.
You've got some excellent images in there and I see you brought back the good images from the original. Also I noticed that you must of spent a lot of time making sure that the rhyme and meter were correct.
How do you feel about it compared to the other versions?
Also like you I thought 'inscripted' was a word, but Pilgrim is right, (he's a clever chap), it should be a word though, it sounds right.
Hope that some of this has been of some use, I'm no expert by any means so I can merely say what I feel.
Thanks.
I've been looking forward to read this since you said that you were going to rewrite it. I read it yesterday probably not too long after you posted it but I wanted to read it a few more times before commenting.
My first impression yesterday was that it was very complicated and with the benefit of being able to read the first two versions I think there is a freshness in the original version that is not in your new version.
You've got some excellent images in there and I see you brought back the good images from the original. Also I noticed that you must of spent a lot of time making sure that the rhyme and meter were correct.
How do you feel about it compared to the other versions?
Also like you I thought 'inscripted' was a word, but Pilgrim is right, (he's a clever chap), it should be a word though, it sounds right.
Hope that some of this has been of some use, I'm no expert by any means so I can merely say what I feel.
Thanks.
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