Two senryu

[serge gurkski]

The crazy Chaffinch.
With all of the sky to choose,
Flew at the window.

Entering boldly,
Blazing bright red bravery.
The humble Robin.

simply fantastic!!

Just one thing: I wold write senryuu or use a makron over the "u".
If you don't, that wold be like writing High Q instead of haiku.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Senry%C5%AB


thanks for the read!

cheers

serge

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as for content: you cannnot know that, but the first senryuu describes me perfectly well! ,-)

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I coud say sth about how your second senryuu explains the first. very fine and subtle! congrats!