05-03-2013, 02:17 AM
Hi,
A good read. I enjoyed the use of Viking imagery, the first stanza especially so is full of well defined images.
The first four lines of the second stanza read very well with that crisscross rhyming that creates the sense of mayhem being experienced. Apart from the slight punctuation errors previously pointed out there's nothing more to criticise.
I don't understand the last bit, although having read the previous comments by Pilgrim it might make more sense. It's the "pennies swapped for pound coins" line that I'm not getting, although saying that I've just read the whole thing again and it is perhaps unravelling before me.
Cheers for the read.
A good read. I enjoyed the use of Viking imagery, the first stanza especially so is full of well defined images.
The first four lines of the second stanza read very well with that crisscross rhyming that creates the sense of mayhem being experienced. Apart from the slight punctuation errors previously pointed out there's nothing more to criticise.
I don't understand the last bit, although having read the previous comments by Pilgrim it might make more sense. It's the "pennies swapped for pound coins" line that I'm not getting, although saying that I've just read the whole thing again and it is perhaps unravelling before me.
Cheers for the read.
wae aye man ye radgie