05-02-2013, 05:13 AM
First off I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Your use of vocabulary really allows the reader to delve into the world of the poem and creates this image that the reader is watching this from afar.
You've managed to keep the poem flowing smoothly however I do feel it gets a bit rough in the second stanza as it seems to drift away from this flowing sensation.
I will most definitely be keeping an eye out for more of your writing.
You've managed to keep the poem flowing smoothly however I do feel it gets a bit rough in the second stanza as it seems to drift away from this flowing sensation.
I will most definitely be keeping an eye out for more of your writing.